Feedback to my initial rough-cut

An essential part of the editing process involved showcasing the initial rough cut of our work in front of the class in order to gain feeback and know how to improve our work for the final cut. Due to time restrictions and problems with the software the work which was presented to the class was only representative of the first 2 minutes and 8 seconds of the 4.5 minute work, yet the style and tone of the overall clip were prevalent enough in the first few minutes that the class audience were given a sufficient indicator of the overall clip.

The comments given by my class included the following:

"Add music to the piece"

This was a reference to the fact that technical difficulties meant that the official audio of the song was not present in the draft and that the only audio present was a low-quality audio in the background of the clips. To ensure the audience could gather a sense of tone however the song was played from an external software to ensure an all-round reflection of the song and video's synergy.

"Darken or add effects to the outdoor scenes"

I am glad that this was adressed, both by a student and a teacher, as one issue I myself had with the video was that I felt the daytime scenes did not have as much visual impact upon the audience as the nighttime scenes, due to the stark contrast in their lighting, as seen below: